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28th-Feb-2009 03:44 pm
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Title: Drabble #2: Such Sweet Sorrows
Author: double_damn 

Rating: G
Summary: Box of chocolates? Damn straight.
Word Count: 240
Note: NONE.

 Havin' trouble right now. Trying to cut. Hold on for story, please.


There is a common saying that reads "Life is like a box of chocolates. You never know what you're gonna get."

 

My reply? "Damn straight."

 

There's so many types. Most of them I find delicious.

 

Delicious, delicious concepts.

 

There's dark chocolate, bitter and with a taste hard to get out of your mouth.

 

Anger.

 

Semi-dark, with hints of caramel.

 

Reality.

 

White chocolate. Too sweet, unnatural.

 

Lies.

 

Milk chocolate and hazelnut. Good by itself, but the pieces difficult to chew make it all the more rewarding.

 

Optimism.

 

You have to be selective, though, because too much chocolate can make you sick.


Comments 
28th-Feb-2009 11:58 pm (UTC)
Being a chocoholic, this totally hits me where I live. :D And the metaphor is a wonderful concept! Great job. The one thing I would say is that it works well as a list, but what about a summation/proper ending? At the moment it just sort of peters off...
28th-Feb-2009 11:58 pm (UTC)
I see what you mean! I shall work on that.
1st-Mar-2009 12:37 am (UTC)
FIXED LIKE WHOA.
1st-Mar-2009 12:51 am (UTC)
I love the concept and I think you pulled it off really well.
1st-Mar-2009 01:12 am (UTC)
Aww, thanks!
4th-Mar-2009 11:23 pm (UTC)
Ooh.
I missed this the first time. But I do like it. I had a bit of trouble figuring out which chocolate was which concept though; that was my only problem.
Nice.
*is now craving chocolate*
5th-Mar-2009 01:24 am (UTC)
Thankee.
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